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  1. Hi Taiwei,

    I was immediately taken aback by the homepage of your storybook project! I love love love that picture and I think it really sets the scene well for your theme! Your storybook is also very nice and organized, which I really appreciate.

    I was in for another wonderful surprise when I clicked on your introduction page! These pictures are just absolutely magnificent! But your writing was even more magnificent! Your introduction was very well-written and easy to follow. I really enjoyed how you used native names for your characters and then translated them to english right after. I think it adds a sort of authenticity to your storybook that no one else will have!

    I cannot wait to read the stories of the phoenix and all of the other amazing characters in your story! I also cannot wait for all of the other amazing pictures that will go with your stories!

    -Libby

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    1. Hello,

      I enjoyed your tale. I read a fiction middle-school grade book talking about the nine-tailed fox, and I'm super happy to see this again. Also, I love a story with a phoenix.

      Your description is excellent! I truly loved how you described the environment and made it feel otherworldly, but at the same time familiar.

      I appreciated the translation of the other names as it gave me another characteristic for the characters.

      There are some punctuation errors, for example, in the last paragraph, after the word "later" you placed a comma and capitalized the word "A", which should be a lower case letter. I understand this was probably unintended.

      I really can't wait to see what you write, and I hope this helps.

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  2. Hello Taiwei!

    Your story book is so fun to look at. The theme of it blends so well with your writing. The images you used work so well with the theme and it is easy to understand what you were trying to accomplish.

    The Introduction page was a pleasure to read and was full of descriptive information that was easy to follow along. You introduced the characters so well and I especially liked how you told us what the names meant.

    I always enjoy reading and learning new things, so it was a blast to read your introduction. I cannot wait to read more of your work. Keep it up

    Best,
    Payton

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  3. Hello Taiwei!

    I thought the combination of the art with the intro was beautiful, and the history of all the characters we will encounter was amazing too! The descriptive words that you used made the place sound so beautiful and serene, the visuals of your story are great! I also thought the first story was a great way of setting up the first character before she meets the scholar and goes on the rest of her journey. I'll be honest the 9 tailed fox is referenced in so many shows that I've watched but I never knew the original significance or where it came from. I think reading more of your story book will help me learn a lot, so I'm excited to see where this story goes! I think you've also inspired me to do some of my own research about the origins as well, it'd be really cool if today's media and pop-culture was also rooted in the original story.

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  4. Hi Taiwei!
    Your Storybook is gorgeous! The photos you chose complement your story so well. I'm also very invested already in the main character's story so good job on creating a story with characters and a plot that are intriguing!
    I will note that the introduction kind of confused me more than it helped to locate me within the story. By the time I had finished reading it, I didn't feel more prepared for the story to come than I was before. This could be remedied by introducing the characters with more description and background in the introduction. I would also be careful about verb tense because your sentences tend to flip back and forth between the two and it can be confusing.
    Overall, this was a great piece filled with brilliant visuals and interesting characters. I know that I definitely want to read more about The Scholar in the future. Excellent job!

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  5. Hi Taiwei!

    First of all, your Storybook is absolutely beautiful! I love all of your photos, they are very high quality and really add to the mysticality of your website. I really appreciate your translation of the Chinese names in your Introduction. Your name choices fit with each of the characters nicely. The juxtaposition of the name “Jingqing”, that is supposed to represent peace, with a wicked, wild creature is very well done. I’m excited to see how the haven holds up throughout your project this semester.

    I loved your first story! I like how it starts very ordinarily with a teenger rebelling against her parents. Qianxue Ke is a very relatable character. It did make me curious about her backstory though. Why does she have an apathy to learning? Did her parents make her learn so much growing up that she feels overwhelmed by learning? Maybe this is something that could be explored in later stories.

    I’m excited to see where you will go with this storybook. I’m excited to learn more about the main character, and I’m also looking forward to maybe hearing more from the parents. What if her parents discover that Qianxue Ke is gone, and one of the stories explores their attitudes and their searching for their child? Nonetheless, I’m excited to see where Qianxue Ke’s journey takes her!

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  6. Hi Taiwei, this storybook is incredibly beautiful, right away the images are gorgeous and the layout is wonderful. It is very pleasing to go through and easy to read, I thoroughly enjoyed it. I hadn't read this story so I liked in the author's note how you explained a few things like about the scholar. My favorite part, and I don't know if it was you or the story, but when it started misting and Qianxue decides it is a perfect time for hiking. I also love the allusion to romance but keeping it open to interpretation for the reader. Every page is set up with a beautiful image that is very prominent and they were all well chosen. In the intro, I enjoyed that you set up each story at the end so the reader has an idea of what is to come. The only comment I can think of is maybe having a picture depicting Jingqing's story as well? Other than that I am looking forward to your other stories and images as well.

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  7. Hi Taiwei,

    I remember reading some of your other stories, and I am glad to say that I am once again impressed! I really enjoyed your choice of imagery throughout your story book and its stories, and I always feel refreshed seeing them side-by-side to your writing and overall stories. I love the character names as well! The storyline fits really well with you choose to tell it, which I have picked up on it being elegant and elaborated. The overall combinations of all parts of your story book really tie it together, from your introduction to the individual stories. I think the way you have designed it all has really enveloped readers and viewers to your stories, as I remembered you immediately from a previous week! Well done.

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  8. Hi Taiwei!
    First of all, I just want to say that I love your website! It's absolutely beautiful. You've put so much time and attention into your aesthetic, and I think it's really paid off. It matches the tone of your writing and the beauty of your stories.
    You also really have a wonderful way with words. The descriptions you write are so incredibly vivid that I can really put myself into the story! The only criticism I have is that sometimes your tenses are a little bit off when you use the word "would." But that's honestly pretty minor and doesn't really interfere with the story telling. I'm also in love with your decision to not describe the scholar in the turquoise gown. I think part of the fun of reading is getting to imagine what the characters look and sound like (it's why I usually prefer reading books before I watch their movie adaptations - the movie takes that away from me!). So I really appreciate being given the freedom to imagine whatever I want for the scholar. Overall, I really love your stories and I'm looking forward to seeing how it develops!

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  9. Hi Taiwei!
    Your story site is extremely pretty! You made very good use of all of the artwork that you found!
    Your descriptions of this world are nicely detailed and help to paint pictures of the beauty of these various places.
    I also think your story seems quite interesting as a premise, where we have this pair of a scholar and a nine-tailed fox going on a journey together to explore beyond what they've known.
    I also liked that you foreshadowed some events in the introduction by highlighting we'll meet the nine-tailed fox, the phoenix and the Hundun.
    My primary suggestion would be to try to give the story an editing pass to keep the entire story in past tense instead of occasionally slipping into present tense and to fix some small grammar errors spread throughout the introduction and first story.

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  10. Hi Taiwei,

    Your storybook site is so pretty! I loved the image you used on your cover page! It really set the tone as to what I was going to be reading about! I believe you did a great job with setting your story up and setting the tone! You used great descriptive imagery and helped the audience understand what this nine-tailed foxes notion is! Are there going to be any other magical creatures in the land? I would have loved to have you elaborate on what the character felt like, looked like, etc. after she turned into a human! I feel like you quickly brushed over that part! I think you did a great job foreshadowing though! I like how you hinted at another story you are going to be writing about the phoenix and the Hundun. Overall, I think you did a great job on your first story! I would suggest rereading your story for grammatical errors and keep the story in past tense, but overall, it looks great!

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  11. Hi Taiwei!

    I really enjoyed your detail. I think that you created a whimsical environment that I would love to visit one day. It sounded beautiful and that truly came through in the descriptions. I, also, like the main character and how she went through this journey. I think that sets her up for a lot of character growth and the possibility of seeing her through this adolescent stage of her life. If I had to change anything, I would consider how you present the story plot. I would have loved to know more about the love interest, whether it be how he got there or why they both were drawn to this area specifically. I would also love to know more about the village that she came from. This sounds like a beautiful place full of people but I do not know why they are not allowed to leave or what kept her there for so long or why she is so enticed to leave. I think those would be cool touching points for the introduction!

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  12. Hi Taiwei,

    I love your storybook!! You are such a good storyteller. I loved how well you described the setting and really emphasized its beauty. I also think the stories of the nine-tailed foxes are so interesting because the creatures are so unique. I was also very impressed with the images you found for your stories. Each creature feels like it fits within the setting you've created, even though they are different from each other. From the moment I hit the home page, I was drawn into the beauty and imagery of the Peach Blossom Paradise. Each new page and story had more images that really added to the beauty of the stories. My only suggestion is to do another quick proofread for minor things, but really that is just me being picky. I had a very hard time finding anything to critique! I'm looking forward to coming back to your storybook to see what else you write! Great job!

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  13. Hi Taiwei,
    I'm stopping by from the Indian Epics class! I really enjoyed reading your stories about the scholar and the nine-tailed fox and the Hundun. The pictures that you chose for the Hundun were really interesting; I had never seen this creature before! I liked how you used your Author's Notes to explain the choices you made in your writing, like your decision to avoid spending too much time on the imagery of the setting of the Peach Blossom Paradise or the intentional lack of information about the characters' physical appearance in "The Encounter". The prologue written in verse is also an interesting choice! Are there autobiographical elements in Qianxue's attitude toward learning and her adventure into the outside world? Her story sounds a lot like the story you tell in your Introduction post about how you got tired of studying in China and decided to leave home to attend OU!

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  14. Hi Taiwei, I enjoyed reading your Storybook project! The stories were lovely and beautifully told. One thing you did really well was incorporating images on your website. I loved that you included so many beautiful pictures. They really helped set the tone for your stories. I also loved your choice to include a little prologue before the stories - your attention to detail really sets your project apart. I hope you've had fun writing it, it seems like you've put a lot of work into it. Good luck with the rest of this class and great work!

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  15. Hi Taiwei! Wow, your storybook was absolutely beautiful! You added amazing art to each page you wrote, plus the overall aesthetic was very otherworldly. You did a fantastic job portraying a fairy world that exists outside of our realm! Additionally, I thought your writing flowed very well. The intro gave detailed background on what we were about to read and your sections were wonderfully written. Personally, I had to read the material more than once because of all the foreign words I had never seen before, but once I slowed down and processed what was happening, I really enjoyed the story. Overall, I think you did an amazing job and I can't wait to see your final project result!

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